Sometimes on the way to your dream,

you get lost and find a better one.

Friday, February 17, 2017

Wednesday's Words on a Friday

The original Words for Wednesday was begun by Delores and eventually taken over by a moveable feast of participants when Delores had computer troubles.

The aim of the words is to encourage us to write, a story, a poem, whatever comes to mind.
If you are posting an entry on your own blog, please let us know so we can come along and read it.

This month the words are supplied by Delores and can be found here.

This week's words are:


1. grave
2. plaid
3. umbrella
4. sizzle
5. yesterday
6. extreme

and/or

1. blended
2. paste
3. jarring
4. waltz
5. rosemary
6. splendid

Here is my story:

part three of the Remy tale: a development ***

Standing by a rosemary bush with one of those fancy blended coffees in his hand, Officer Steve Brendan idly watched the roller-skating troupe practising a waltz. Wearing old-time ballroom dancing outfits, the spectacle was rather splendid, apart from one jarring note. 


A large, shambling man, dressed in tatty cast-offs and holding a plaid umbrella, made his way right through the dancers, coming towards Steve. Beginning to rummage through a garbage bin, he muttered just loud enough for Steve to hear.


"G'Day Steve," he said. "How's things?"
"Not bad Pete, " said Steve, holding up his cup to hide his mouth. "What are you doing here? Last I heard you were undercover in the East End alleys"


"Still am," replied Pete. "Got a word about that jewellery heist, the one where some bugger said Remy was hiding them. Yesterday I put the word around I was interested, said I might know a good fence, then some small guy I never saw before speaks up and says it's a set-up. The jewels are paste, not real."


Steve had to gain control of himself at that last statement, he'd nearly turned toward Pete. Wouldn't do for anyone watching to find out Pete wasn't the bum they thought he was. 


Steve took a large mouthful of his coffee and pretended to choke so as to be nearer the bin and Pete. Under the cover of a handkerchief wiping off his chin Steve asked, "What do you mean fake? "


"I heard it's a set-up, look into the husband," said Pete without hardly moving his lips at all. He wandered away and Steve returned his attention to the dancers.


"Could be an insurance scam," he thought, then suddenly, "Uh-oh, if Bernie's back in town, things could get extremely hot pretty quick. Things could sizzle"


Bernie had recently been released from prison after eight years for faking insurance claims and embezzling from his company. If he was up to his old tricks so soon, he'd be back in prison until they carried him out to his grave.


Officer Steve Brendan tossed his now empty cup into the bin and slowly walked away, still glancing at the dancers now and again as his mind churned with possible action plans.








***I'm not entirely happy with this, I had the story written and by accidentally clicking  a wrong button I lost the whole thing and have had to rewrite from memory; at the same time, the phone rang, it was the vet telling me Angel was ready to come home. 

I have most of the story the way I remembered it but the last four paragraphs aren't the same. I just can't remember exactly what I had there. From now on I'll write everything on paper first.



20 comments:

  1. It's a terrific story as it is. How about a sequel?

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    1. only slightly confused; Thank you. A sequel would be chapter four. We'll see how the words go next week.Maybe they'll fit, maybe they won't.

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  2. I had that happen a couple of times. It did help for me to email it to myself as I worked on it.
    Part 3, some of us need refreshing on that. Maybe us links? Sounds good.

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    1. S.J.Qualls; I always forget about using links to the previous chapters. I shall write myself a note.

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  3. Great story as it is, as noted above.

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  4. Poor Remy! He's still getting the blame!!!!

    Just click on "Save" on your Word Document (what you're writing) as you go along when writing, River. Get into the habit of doing it after every few words...every sentence or so. Save what you're writing right from the very beginning...from the first word or the title...and then keep clicking on the small "Save" icon from thereon. Then you won't lose anything.

    And the story continues...well done1 :)

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    1. Lee; no he's not, they're just letting the underworld crooks think he is, while they work on whodunnit.
      I was writing it on the new computer and the scrolling system there is weird and opening more than one wordpad document wasn't a good idea. I think I clicked 'copy' then clicked 'paste' onto a wordpad page and it just vanished. Being such a short story I didn't think about constantly 'saving' and on the new computer that isn't as simple as it is on the old one, for some reason it doesn't just save straight to documents, since I somehow screwed that up too and opening 'documents' opens my music folder...
      Right now I'm on the old computer, which is working so much better since I bought the new one (*~*)

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    2. See! By getting a new computer you scared the old one into working! It got jealous!! :)

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  5. .. great episode River.... the plot thickens..
    It's frustrating when you lose your thoughts. ... Barb xxxx

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    1. Barbara; thank you. I was very annoyed at losing the story, especially since I hadn't quite finished editing and adding bits where they would enhance the story. The whole day yesterday was a bit stressful, with Angel at the vet and a new neighbour moving in upstairs. I think I'll leave the story writing until after dinner like I usually do.

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  6. You should be "entirely" happy. Very good job and glad to see more of Remy and Steve.

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    1. Granny Annie; happy enough, but I know there's something missing that I can't remember.

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  7. Good job just as it is!

    I "think" better when writing a story or chapter on paper prior to typing it on the computer. I've never lost anything on the computer yet, but it's reassuring to know I have a paper back-up in case I do.

    Have a super weekend!

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    1. Susan; my stores usually come to me late n the night and I can't sleep until I get it down, so I most often write them straight to a 'new post' page, which is a great method because then I can schedule it the minute it's finished.

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  8. Well, I enjoyed it
    Thank you

    Have a great weekend

    All the best Jan

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    1. Lowcarb team member; glad you enjoyed it.Parts one and two are somewhere back in the archives and I should post links, but I always forget.

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